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Dark Desire (Touched By You, #1) - Emily Jane Trent ARC provided by author in exchange for an honest review This book needs major editing ,{Plot needs to be tighten and the flow of the whole story needs work . The author I feel has no clear defining role of the characteristics her characters need or should particularly have . They were all over the place , romance wise and plot wise . The story needs clear lines drawn in order to develop and with his book i could not see the direction it was going in . Instead of the plot being drawn out , i felt this would have been better as a full length novel instead of a novella . All these novellas make no sense to me and i don't really novellas on a daily , so i cannot see myself buying all 8. I would really not have that much interest in the series currently .It would have given more time for the story to develop and for me to see real growth in the characters. Wording and pacing also needs work , everything was a little too wish washy and jumbled for me to feel anything of the story or even like the characters . I felt even though the author took inspiration from twilight , she tried to make it into a twilight look a like instead of taking the inspiration and putting a different , fun twist on it . ( Because really BDSM plot lines that have been inspired by twilight have been done by various successful author , and its always the same thing , i really need to see a new spin on it ) . I am so tired of the billionaire guy who is successful and handsome meeting the virgin , pretty girl that is so naive and innocent and she rocks his world figuratively and literally . I need MORE ! Complete substance , grit and meat is what good stories are made of and sadly this was quite lacking in almost all areas. I can say that the author has a beautiful , passionate way with words that i admire and if she fleshes out all the mistakes in her plot and her story telling got better than i would have a vested interest in looking forward to her novels . I feel this could have been way better.I thank the author for providing this to me as an ARC and i hope my critique helps to enhance the book in order to make it successful .Thank You Emily 2 stars